our peers gave us feedback on our first draft with all of the marks we were given being 30+ out of 40, which we were very pleased about.
strengths:
- 'ellie's performance is AMAZE - and she looks hot as fudge'
- 'performance stuff was great'
- 'great variety of shots'
- 'ellie is gorge'
- 'jon u fab too'
- 'good song'
- 'the set is fab'
- 'best video!'
- 'ellie's good performance! looks a natural'
- 'split mouths good'
- 'ellie's performance is excellent!'
- 'KEEP BLACK AND WHITE!!!!!!!!!!!'
- 'www: ellie's performance, dom's f1 driving'
- 'very strong performance, esp. ellie'
weaknesses:
- 'why is zahra playing a box?'
- 'constant use of B&W is making some shots look really dark and un-seeable'
- 'not sure about the box or the bath?'
- 'lose b&w'
- 'some shots have too much dashboard in the car'
- 'drumming is wronggggg'
- 'pixelly shots?'
- 'don't like ending'
- 'better in colour maybe?'
- 'need to focus more on ellie'
- 'the box.... why?'
- 'need a bit more convincing performance by dom and zahra'
- 'zahra isn't playing drums at the start, she's playing drums'
- 'some shots are slightly too dark'
- 'why is zahra playing a box?'
- 'ebi: drum kit not box'
- 'focus more on ellie!'
- 'black and white... constant use is questionable'
from this feedback we can gather that our performances are good and the video as a whole is good, yet a prominent problem throughout is the use of a box as zahra's drum kit. the use of black and white throughout has been disputed, so to keep with our original plans and to 'cater' to everyone's tastes, we are using black and white with colour in the chorus. ideally we would reshoot the drama studio performance shots to get rid of the box and replace it with an actual drum kit, but we cannot reshoot as there is too much of that footage in the video which blend well together and we are unable to move a drum kit into the drama studio due to school rules.
fast in my car - first draft
this is our first draft for our music video. in the coming weeks we will experiment with colours and filters and see how it will look with the choruses in colour and the rest in black and white. i am very pleased with this; although there is a lot to be done to improve, shots that need to be re-shot and editing issues to be fixed i'm very proud with my first draft.
magazine advert research
jonathan created this emaze presentation comparing several magazine adverts from different artists as inspiration for our magazine articles.
digipak - peers
i gave feedback via a surveymonkey on all of the other groups' digipaks and said what went well and what could be better. my favourite digipak was cosmo's.
i love the link between the name 'cosmo' and the galaxies theme. the colours blend well together and i love the individual, unique drawings like the skeleton below george's face. the editing is slick and flawless. i really don't think i could fault this digipak.
another favourite is the encoded digipak. i love the consistent white cloudy background. i think it looks very clean and professional. the only things i would say to improve are the plain cd - i'm not sure if that's what they were going for but i personally would like to see some kind of design even if it is simple. also, the white text fades into the background at some points and i can't see the words. perhaps all the text should be black, or a darker grey.
digipak feedback
our digipak received mostly positive feedback from the other groups. our digipak was rated one of the top two. below are the specific comments that we were given:
The bottom left square is the best picture out of any on the digipaks. I think the entire thing is very professional and the theme is clear and obvious.
Alleyways digipak is my favourite by far. It looks so professional from the lyrics page to the professional layout of the front covered image. There isn’t much to improve and i am struggling for things to suggest.
I really like Alleyways digipak, introduces the band and the genre at the same time, could include more writing on the CD.
WWW: Like the picture of the Group together a lot it is high quality.
EBI: Not a fan of the bin on fire or CD. The bin picture quality isn't the best, if retaken it might look better. The CD is extremely basic so unless you’re going for minimalism I suggest soothing more interesting. I also hope that the microphone image isn't the front cover because it’s more suited to the inside of the CD holder. I personally do not like the silhouette shots maybe keep one and have another band photo in an interesting location.
Alleyways is also one of the top digipaks and needs no words.
The alleyways digipak have quite a few images on theirs that make it look over loaded. a lot of the pictures look professional. You can see that the text works well with the black coloured background. The overall layout is really good some of it is really over loaded but still looks amazing.
Good, strong imagery here; the font matches, everything looks great - apart from the images don't totally flow. Maybe rearrange a few, swap them out to get a better balance! I'd make the font bigger on the front cover as well, apart from that, it's brilliant!
Great pictures and really like the text. All looks very slick and professional and links to the genre. Nothing bad to say really!
I think this is possibly the best as it has colour and sticks with the bands themes and has synergy with the other products. It has a lot of good pictures which have been nicely edited to fit the style of the band and the genre.
I really can’t think of anything to improve on for this I really like the outcome of the digipak.
A more interesting front cover just a picture of a microphone would not make me want to pick up the album if I saw it in a shop.
I like the theme and text. It is hard to tell which is the front and back covers.
Theme is good Text is easy to read Hard to distinguish between front and back covers etc.
Great photographs, professional editing and layout.
I love it all and I would improve nothing. Perfect.
Everything about this digipak is amazing - the colours, the text, the images, the genre AND the overall layout. Improvements: there aren't any - where can I buy it?
in response to this feedback we will change our digipak as we see fit to try and improve it.
The bottom left square is the best picture out of any on the digipaks. I think the entire thing is very professional and the theme is clear and obvious.
Alleyways digipak is my favourite by far. It looks so professional from the lyrics page to the professional layout of the front covered image. There isn’t much to improve and i am struggling for things to suggest.
I really like Alleyways digipak, introduces the band and the genre at the same time, could include more writing on the CD.
WWW: Like the picture of the Group together a lot it is high quality.
EBI: Not a fan of the bin on fire or CD. The bin picture quality isn't the best, if retaken it might look better. The CD is extremely basic so unless you’re going for minimalism I suggest soothing more interesting. I also hope that the microphone image isn't the front cover because it’s more suited to the inside of the CD holder. I personally do not like the silhouette shots maybe keep one and have another band photo in an interesting location.
Alleyways is also one of the top digipaks and needs no words.
The alleyways digipak have quite a few images on theirs that make it look over loaded. a lot of the pictures look professional. You can see that the text works well with the black coloured background. The overall layout is really good some of it is really over loaded but still looks amazing.
Good, strong imagery here; the font matches, everything looks great - apart from the images don't totally flow. Maybe rearrange a few, swap them out to get a better balance! I'd make the font bigger on the front cover as well, apart from that, it's brilliant!
Great pictures and really like the text. All looks very slick and professional and links to the genre. Nothing bad to say really!
I think this is possibly the best as it has colour and sticks with the bands themes and has synergy with the other products. It has a lot of good pictures which have been nicely edited to fit the style of the band and the genre.
I really can’t think of anything to improve on for this I really like the outcome of the digipak.
A more interesting front cover just a picture of a microphone would not make me want to pick up the album if I saw it in a shop.
I like the theme and text. It is hard to tell which is the front and back covers.
Theme is good Text is easy to read Hard to distinguish between front and back covers etc.
Great photographs, professional editing and layout.
I love it all and I would improve nothing. Perfect.
Everything about this digipak is amazing - the colours, the text, the images, the genre AND the overall layout. Improvements: there aren't any - where can I buy it?
in response to this feedback we will change our digipak as we see fit to try and improve it.
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