our peers gave us feedback on our first draft with all of the marks we were given being 30+ out of 40, which we were very pleased about.
strengths:
- 'ellie's performance is AMAZE - and she looks hot as fudge'
- 'performance stuff was great'
- 'great variety of shots'
- 'ellie is gorge'
- 'jon u fab too'
- 'good song'
- 'the set is fab'
- 'best video!'
- 'ellie's good performance! looks a natural'
- 'split mouths good'
- 'ellie's performance is excellent!'
- 'KEEP BLACK AND WHITE!!!!!!!!!!!'
- 'www: ellie's performance, dom's f1 driving'
- 'very strong performance, esp. ellie'
weaknesses:
- 'why is zahra playing a box?'
- 'constant use of B&W is making some shots look really dark and un-seeable'
- 'not sure about the box or the bath?'
- 'lose b&w'
- 'some shots have too much dashboard in the car'
- 'drumming is wronggggg'
- 'pixelly shots?'
- 'don't like ending'
- 'better in colour maybe?'
- 'need to focus more on ellie'
- 'the box.... why?'
- 'need a bit more convincing performance by dom and zahra'
- 'zahra isn't playing drums at the start, she's playing drums'
- 'some shots are slightly too dark'
- 'why is zahra playing a box?'
- 'ebi: drum kit not box'
- 'focus more on ellie!'
- 'black and white... constant use is questionable'
from this feedback we can gather that our performances are good and the video as a whole is good, yet a prominent problem throughout is the use of a box as zahra's drum kit. the use of black and white throughout has been disputed, so to keep with our original plans and to 'cater' to everyone's tastes, we are using black and white with colour in the chorus. ideally we would reshoot the drama studio performance shots to get rid of the box and replace it with an actual drum kit, but we cannot reshoot as there is too much of that footage in the video which blend well together and we are unable to move a drum kit into the drama studio due to school rules.
